This is an extremely important video and deserves to be viewed by as many people as possible. It is a well designed and a moving tribute the Guru and President Gorbachev.
With a few corrections it can be even better.
Congratulations to everyone who worked so hard on it.
Slide 1
From time immemorial,
History has been dealing
with tyrants and liberators.
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From time immemorial,
History has been dealing
with tyrants and liberators.
Slide 2
Before long, it will have to deal
seriously with peacemakers.
- Sri Chinmoy
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hyphen to en-dash –
Before long, it will have to deal
seriously with peacemakers.
– Sri Chinmoy
Slide 3
The first meeting took place
on 29 May 1990 at the
Canadian Governor-General's
Residence in Ottawa.
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smart apostrophe ’ not ' in Governor-General’s
The first meeting took place
on 29 May 1990 at the
Canadian Governor-General's
Residence in Ottawa.
Slide 4
"I have heard so much
about you and your work.
We must work together
for world peace."
- Mikhail Gorbachev
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add the word, President
“I have heard so much
about you and your work.
We must work together
for world peace.”
– President Mikhail Gorbachev
Slide 5
July 17, 1991
Sri Chinmoy met for the second
time with President Mikhail Gorbachev,
at The Ritz in London, UK.
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keep date format 17 July 1991
17 July 1991
Sri Chinmoy met for the second
time with President Mikhail Gorbachev,
at The Ritz in London, UK.
Slide 6
May 12, 1992
Sri Chinmoy and President Gorbachev
meet for the third time
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keep date format 12 May 1992
present tense to past tense, meet to met
add period at end of sentence.
12 May 1992
Sri Chinmoy and President Gorbachev
met for the third time.
Slide 7
Their meeting is held
at the Waldorf Astoria
in New York, NY, USA.
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delete , NY, USA
Their meeting is held
at the Waldorf Astoria
in New York.
Slide 8
President Gorbachev is accompanied
by his wife Raisa Maximovna
and their daughter Irina Virganskaya.
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President Gorbachev is accompanied
by his wife Raisa Maximovna
and their daughter Irina Virganskaya.
Slide 9
Raisa Maximovna Gorbacheva
and her daughter Irina visit
an exhibition of Sri Chinmoy’s paintings
at the Jharna-Kala Gallery, in Manhattan
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period at the end of the sentence.
Raisa Maximovna Gorbacheva
and her daughter Irina visit
an exhibition of Sri Chinmoy’s paintings
at the Jharna-Kala Gallery, in Manhattan.
Slide 10
Sri Chinmoy dedicates the
exhibition to the first lady of Russia
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Capitalise First Lady
Sri Chinmoy dedicates the
exhibition to the First Lady of Russia
Slide 11
and offers her one
of his works of art
for her private collection.
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and offers her one
of his works of art
for her private collection.
Slide 12
Raisa Maximovna chose
100,000 painting
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from 100,000 to the 27,000th painting
Raisa Maximovna chose
the 27,000th painting
> Picture of the 100,000th painting.
Change:
a hi-res file of the 27,000th can be provided
to replace the 100,000th painting
Slide 13
“Meeting with your paintings
is a meeting with the nobility
of the human soul”
- Raisa Maksimovna
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period at the and of the sentence.
correct spelling of Maksimovna to Maximovna
hyphen to en-dash –
“Meeting with your paintings
is a meeting with the nobility
of the human soul.”
– Raisa Maximovna
Slide 14
October 10, 1994
Sri Chinmoy met with
President Mikhail Gorbachev
for the sixth time.
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keep date format and
correct date 16 October 1994
16 October 1994
Sri Chinmoy met with
President Mikhail Gorbachev
for the sixth time.
Slide 15
The President and
Raisa Maximovna Gorbacheva
together held the Peace Torch,
at the New York Palace Hotel
in New York, NY, USA.
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delete words and add Manhattan
The President and
Raisa Maximovna Gorbacheva
together held the Peace Torch,
at the New York Palace Hotel
in Manhattan, New York.
Slide 16
"Your deeds are invaluable,
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possibly combine this
text with the next slide.
"Your deeds are invaluable,
Slide 17
for they cannot be measured
by any economic
or political parameters;
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possibly combine this
text with the next slide.
for they cannot be measured
by any economic
or political parameters;
Slide 18
they are noble
and cure the human soul.”
- Mikhail Gorbachev
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hyphen to en-dash –
they are noble
and cure the human soul.”
– Mikhail Gorbachev
Slide 19
On March 4th, 1998
Sri Chinmoy welcomes
President Gorbachev
and Raisa Maximovna
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keep date format 4 March 1996
On 4 March 1998
Sri Chinmoy welcomes
President Gorbachev
and Raisa Maximovna
Slide 20
to a celebration
of the Presiden ’s 67th Birthday
at the Waldorf-Astoria Towers
in New York.
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add t to the word President
to a celebration
of the President’s 67th Birthday
at the Waldorf-Astoria Towers
in New York.
Slide 21
March 1, 2001
Sri Chinmoy has a private meeting
with President Gorbachev,
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keep date format 1 March 1996
1 March 2001
Sri Chinmoy has a private meeting
with President Gorbachev,
Slide 22
presenting him with a special award
"President Gorbachev:
The Home of Oneness-Peace-Dream-World"
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double quotation marks “...” to single ‘...’
Add period at the end of sentence.
presenting him with a special award
‘President Gorbachev:
The Home of Oneness-Peace-Dream-World’.
Slide 23
On the morning of March 2nd
- President Gorbachev's
70th birthday
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hyphen to en-dash –
add – at the end of the line
make mart apostrophe ’ for Gorbachev’s
On the morning of March 2nd
– President Gorbachev’s
70th birthday –
Slide 24
Sri Chinmoy prayerfully offers
seventy red roses at the
Long Home of Raisa Maximovna.
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Sri Chinmoy prayerfully offers
seventy red roses at the
Long Home of Raisa Maximovna.
Slide 25
President Gorbachev and his daughter,
Irina, welcome Sri Chinmoy
to the President's birthday celebration
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smart apostrophe
period at the end of the sentence.
President Gorbachev and his daughter,
Irina, welcome Sri Chinmoy
to the President’s birthday celebration.
Slide 26
September 16, 2006
Sri Chinmoy solemnly
greets President Gorbachev
on Aspiration-Ground
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keep date format 16 September 2006
Modify wording, at Aspiration-Ground in New York
Add period at end of sentence
16 September 2006
Sri Chinmoy solemnly greets
President Gorbachev
at Aspiration-Ground in New York.
Slide 27
Before you became
The pilot of the world-peace-boat,
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Before you became
The pilot of the world-peace-boat,
Slide 28
This world of ours
Was sinking deeper
and deeper into despair.
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to see if Was is capitalised
This world of ours
Was sinking deeper
and deeper into despair.
Slide 29
And now, what do we see?
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And now, what do we see?
Slide 30
A most powerful
hope-light-dance!
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A most powerful
hope-light-dance!
Slide 31
Long live, long live,
The fondness-child of Stavropol!
- Sri Chinmoy
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hyphen to en-dash –
Long live, long live,
The fondness-child of Stavropol!
– Sri Chinmoy